Blog #9: Rewriting Past Sentences

1. The first type of people are those who don’t think about what they are posting before they post it and then those who take their time and plan something that they know would reflect them in the way they want to be seen.

1. The first people don't take there time before posting something, however, the second people makes sure they are posting something that reflects them in a positive way.

2.In anything that anyone writes diction is always an important aspect in how people read and form opinions on that particular work.

2. I any piece of writing diction plays a major role in affecting the readers opinion on it.

3.One main example is a paper about the same topic written to your best friend will be a lot different than written to your boss or professor.

3.One example is a paper about the same topic written to your best friend will be a lot different than written to your boss or professor.

4.In this tweet my audience was directed towards my followers whom of which are mostly composed of my friends. 

4. IN this particular tweet the audience was my followers on twitter, which are mostly my friends.

5.This was my goal of using the incorrect grammar because I knew that it would reflect me in the way I wanted to be reflected to this certain audience.

5. I achieved y goal of the tweet by using my incorrect grammar and portraying myself in the way i wanted to be shown to this audience.

6.  Whether that is to persuade, to someone get something off their chest, or to just let people know their opinion about something.

6. Whether that is to persuade someone, to get something off my chest, or to just let people know their opinion about something.

7. For this tweet my purpose wasn’t to have someone respond rather than to just get my opinion out in the public.

7. For my tweet the purpose was to just get my opinions out in the public rather than have any sort of response.

8.It is quite extraordinary how from something so small as one sentence can let you in on so much about a person.

8. It is quite extraordinary how a simple sentence can show you so much about a person

9.Every time I ever make a tweet I always think about the kind of persona that I am giving out and the way people will view it.

9. Every time I make a tweet i always reflect on the persona that i am giving out through this tweet.

10.In the case of my tweet about the bucks in the playoffs this reflects my true identity in many ways such as my views on things, my interests and even my overall attitude.

10.In the case of my tweet about the Bucks in the playoffs this reflects my true identity in many ways such as my views on things, my interests and even my overall attitude.



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Blog #8 "How to Watch your Brother Die"

In the story "How to Watch Your Brother Die" by Michael Lassey, there is a conflict between these two brothers. Through the context of the story we can infer that one brother is a homosexual and one is heterosexual. The heterosexual brother has very traditional views and doesn't want to accept that his brother is a homosexual. He doesn't like the idea of it and it goes against what he believes in. The twist to the story is that the homosexual brother is dying. As his brother is dying the heterosexual brother begins to become closer to his brother and more accepting of his way of life. The heterosexual is so set on his traditional views throughout the poem that this is surprising that he starts learning to accept him. In the poem the heterosexual even says that he would rather hug his children than his brother's lover. Both this poem and the commercial that we watched are trying to show that there are many different sexuality in the world and that we need to be accepting of all of them.  Both of these display this message in a different way but both are just as effective. The commercial was showing that everyday life was the same through a gay couple while the poem was showing that even someone with the most traaditonal views can learn to be accepting.



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